六年級英語作文及點評：Planting Trees

 　　Planting Trees

　　It’s spring. It’s time to plant trees.

　　I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast. We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.

　　【要領點評】

　　小作者寫了一次植樹的經(jīng)歷，但他并沒有單純拘泥于植樹的過程。既有過程，也有感覺，能使文章打動讀者，給人以啟發(fā)。作文的 后一段就非常好，兩句話勝似千言萬語。我們可以學習一下這種寫法。 既描述過程，又適時提自己的看法或想法的寫法，在作文中叫做“夾敘夾議”,描述過程為了提出一種思想服務，提出看法或想法使原本平實的描述有了意義。我們在以后的寫作中也可以試一試。